I wrote this along with Cajek a while back ago, and I need some constructive criticism. What d'ya think?--Æ 13:26, 17 December 2007 (UTC)
Humour:
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8.1945056
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Quite a bit of humor contained within. I enjoy the plays off of "there," and the inherent ambiguity on the history.
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Concept:
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9.6546324
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Good concept.
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Prose and formatting:
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8.0156572
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There's some minor spelling errors, and the lack of links makes a wall of black text, which causes my eyes to glaze over like a delicious Krispy Kreme donut slipping sensuously off the line into a box, it and eleven of its companions awaiting my every move, and oh dear I believe I have salivated upon your review. I apologize.
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Images:
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9.4621792
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Fine on images.
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Miscellaneous:
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7.3468342
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Ah, the dreaded pi score. It comes into play because the article seems to end with an audible "plop," stopping without any sense of a resolution or conclusion. You bring us along and then leave us standing upon the cliff edge without a line delivering tasty, tasty crispy warm donuts fresh and hot and gooey and oh there I go again drooling over your review. I should probably eat something. Upped because of addition of ending. Hurrah, ending!
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Final Score:
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42.6738086
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Most importantly, add a conclusion! Round out the article and lock it down like a Krispy Kreme locks its doors as I approach, fearing my unwhetted appetite overwhelming their machinery and sweeping through their stock like a plague of locust does through Egyptian newborns oh yes the review. Fix a few spelling errors and fancy up the formatting a smidge, and you're good.
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Reviewer:
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Contestant CUN -- VFH NotM Buzz Ctrbs 23:17, 19 December 2007 (UTC) (modified Contestant CUN -- VFH NotM Buzz Ctrbs 00:08, 20 December 2007 (UTC))
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